An assignment from my first creative writing class. This is what I came up with.
A quiet but powerful moment of rock bottomness, the consequences of substance abuse.
Though I notice a possible tense slip in the final paragraph. The rest of the piece is in present tense, but it ends in past tense. That threw me a little.
Thanks for sharing.
Thank you so much for the feedback and taking the time to read. I’ll have to go back and edit the end. Much appreciated!
Gritty! You really have a way of immersing your reader. You're really pulling in every sense. It's almost uncomfortable 🤣
I really appreciate the kind words and you taking the time to read. Thank you so much!
The narrative voice is STRONG with this one! I love so many of these wordings. You could legit do literary fiction and I’d soak up every letter 🤩
Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts. It is appreciated more than you know. I’m glad you enjoyed it!
A quiet but powerful moment of rock bottomness, the consequences of substance abuse.
Though I notice a possible tense slip in the final paragraph. The rest of the piece is in present tense, but it ends in past tense. That threw me a little.
Thanks for sharing.
Thank you so much for the feedback and taking the time to read. I’ll have to go back and edit the end. Much appreciated!
Gritty! You really have a way of immersing your reader. You're really pulling in every sense. It's almost uncomfortable 🤣
I really appreciate the kind words and you taking the time to read. Thank you so much!
The narrative voice is STRONG with this one! I love so many of these wordings. You could legit do literary fiction and I’d soak up every letter 🤩
Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts. It is appreciated more than you know. I’m glad you enjoyed it!